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Wow, Tom - another essay! :) You have produced an really interesting read here, with lots of food for thought, and the scope to take these ideas further... so, the following comments are not criticisms, but requests and suggestions. So, firstly... have another look/listen to Phil's presentations on structuring the review (available in the Contexts section on myUCA - 'Review Primers') You basically need to introduce your review and the sources you are going to use, and why you are using them - see here for Phil's example -
'This review examines Merian C. Cooper and Ernest B. Schoedsack’s King Kong (1933), looking specifically at the the film’s representation of race. Key sources are Edward Said’s Orientialism (1978), which explores Western European views of ’the East’, and Robert JC Young’s, Postcolonialism: A Very Short Introduction (2003) for its definition of imperialism. The review will argue how it’s possible to interpret Cooper and Schoedsack’s King Kong as a colonial fantasy and will compare the 1933 original with Peter Jackson’s 2005 remake to explore how race and its representation has changed.'
(Sorry for the lack of italics - can't do it in comments for some reason!)
You need to include the film poster as your first image, and then label all the others thereafter - the first two 'Marias' have escaped labeling here for some reason :)
In Phil's presentations, he also talks about how you should embed the quotes and then unpack them, rather than just dropping them in... you have a whole load of really useful (and to honest, quite scary!) quotes at the end there that are just sitting there not pulling their weight - make sure that you use them within the text as support. You also need to reference where the quote was retrieved from - see the Harvard guide for full details of the different sources. Likewise, the images - make sure that you tie them in to the text by referring to them, so '...as shown in Fig.2,' for example. When you mention other films or productions, you need to have the year of production alongside, so 'The Terminator (1984)' for example. You only need the date the first time you mention the film though...
Wow, Tom - another essay! :) You have produced an really interesting read here, with lots of food for thought, and the scope to take these ideas further... so, the following comments are not criticisms, but requests and suggestions.
ReplyDeleteSo, firstly... have another look/listen to Phil's presentations on structuring the review (available in the Contexts section on myUCA - 'Review Primers') You basically need to introduce your review and the sources you are going to use, and why you are using them - see here for Phil's example -
'This review examines Merian C. Cooper and Ernest B.
Schoedsack’s King Kong (1933), looking specifically at the
the film’s representation of race. Key sources are Edward
Said’s Orientialism (1978), which explores Western
European views of ’the East’, and Robert JC Young’s,
Postcolonialism: A Very Short Introduction (2003) for its
definition of imperialism. The review will argue how it’s
possible to interpret Cooper and Schoedsack’s King
Kong as a colonial fantasy and will compare the 1933
original with Peter Jackson’s 2005 remake to explore
how race and its representation has changed.'
(Sorry for the lack of italics - can't do it in comments for some reason!)
You need to include the film poster as your first image, and then label all the others thereafter - the first two 'Marias' have escaped labeling here for some reason :)
In Phil's presentations, he also talks about how you should embed the quotes and then unpack them, rather than just dropping them in... you have a whole load of really useful (and to honest, quite scary!) quotes at the end there that are just sitting there not pulling their weight - make sure that you use them within the text as support. You also need to reference where the quote was retrieved from - see the Harvard guide for full details of the different sources.
Likewise, the images - make sure that you tie them in to the text by referring to them, so '...as shown in Fig.2,' for example. When you mention other films or productions, you need to have the year of production alongside, so 'The Terminator (1984)' for example. You only need the date the first time you mention the film though...
Looking forward to what you made of 'King Kong'!
Thank you for the feedback Jackie! I'll look into my essay structure and try to tighten up on referencing for next time.
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